Saturday, May 19, 2012 17:42

Disturbances

June 14th, 2011

Thank you for all your encouraging comments!

Here is another Flash 55 book teaser from Boston’s perspective:

Boston held her breath. One minute, two …still the wall monitor remained blank. She didn’t know what to do next. She hadn’t meant to hurt Jason or break the machine.

Suddenly, the monitor switched on. Jason knelt inside a large metal room. He looked up at her. His face red; his hair wet with sweat. “Now look what you’ve done!”

“What I’ve done?”

 

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You’re Doing Great

June 3rd, 2011

 

Here’s a continuation from my last post…

“Has he spotted you?” The 911 operator said.

“I was…in the back closing up…he broke in through a window…in front.”

The operator’s fingers flew across a black keyboard, typing the caller’s words in the shorthand unique to her profession. She hit send. The first packet of text burst into the ether, flashing across the screens of a half dozen patrol cars.

“You’re doing great,” the operator reassured her and then the line went dead.

 

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A Casket?

May 27th, 2011

THANK YOU FOR ALL OF THE SUPPORTIVE COMMENTS!

Here’s another Flash 55 Teaser from a cut perspective:

 

A bored 911 operator sat down at her sterile workstation and scanned the quote of the day:

Life shrinks or expands in proportion to one’s courage. – Anais Nin

She touched her bruised side and trembled. Her boyfriend had hit her that morning. Her headset clicked. She straightened and pushed the button. “Nine-one-one, what is your emergency?”

“Gunman…casket,” a frantic voice spit out between short breaths.

“Okay, calm down,” she said. “Are you in danger?”

The voice quivered, “He’s…out…there.”

 

 

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Computer vortex

May 17th, 2011

Here’s another teaser from Boston’s cut perspective:

Boston pushed the door. It creaked open. Light issued from under the door at the other end of the hallway–appearing like a long dark tunnel. 

I can’t believe I left my purse? Boston was so angry she wanted to ditch the purse entirely if it wasn’t for her driver’s license, school identification, and the hundred dollars her mother gave her for groceries.

…She was riding the emotional roller coaster from hell. Love and hate were opposite sides of a two-edged sword. One part of her hoped this visit would elicit a sincere apology from Jason, while the other part wished his machine would malfunction and suck him into a deadly programming vortex.

A BIG THANK YOU FOR ALL THE SUPPORTIVE COMMENTS!

I just wanted to take one moment to clarify that I was not cutting Boston from my story. The plot will stay the same. I am rewriting the chapters that were in her perspective. Now they will be in Jason’s perspective. It took me 6 months to decide to do this and I am finding that it is making this a tighter story.

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Cutting My Babies

May 13th, 2011

Boston Komen

I am in the middle of the final revision before I send this manuscript out. Per the professional suggestion of the book doctor who analyzed DiSemblance, I am tightening my point of view by moving from 7 character heads to only 2. This means I have to let Boston’s chapter, which comes just after her attack, go.

This is really hard!

So as a final farewell to it.  I am publishing most of that chapter in this post. Someday when the book becomes super popular and my fans are wondering what was going on in Boston’s mind, they can come here and read this post.

Here it is! …Enjoy:

Blind with tears, Boston raced up her rickety porch, yanked back the screen door, and sprinted through her trailer. Passing her mother playing cards at the kitchen table, she slammed her bedroom door shut and flung herself on the bed. It was pitch dark inside her room except for the crack below the door that led to the hallway. Boston liked it that way. She felt safer in the dark than the light.

Last summer she had transformed her bedroom into a dark room. She covered the window with black plastic. Purchased a workbench from the Salvation Army store with some babysitting money, and then placed it in the area adjacent to the bed that her mother had reserved for a dresser. The workbench became her processing station. That was where she prepared her negatives, dipping the photographic paper in just the right chemicals for the effect she wanted and then hanging them to dry on the line she had strung up by nailing a rope into the walls between the top of her bed and the opposite wall.

The darkness hid the bleakness of the room with its bare sheetrock walls, stained carpet, and lack of furnishings—the only furniture beside the workbench being a single twin mattress, no frame.

Boston climbed under the covers, wrapping her body in the blanket like a cocoon. A chair squeaked against the kitchen linoleum as her mother pushed away from the table. Boston stopped crying and looked at the crack below the door. Her mother’s feet appeared on the other side, blocking out the light as a soft rap sounded on the wood.

Boston felt torn. She needed her mother so much right now, but it had been so long since they had been able to talk to each other. More than anything, she needed to know someone else in the world cared about her. She tried to call out, but her throat choked with sobs and she pushed her face into her pillow to smother the horrible sound.

The door slowly opened. “Boston?”

Boston looked up, her eyes swollen red. Her mother was standing in the doorway bathed in the hallway light. Carmen Komen was an aged carbon copy of Boston, attractive and petite with long dark hair pulled back at the nape of her neck and concerned blue eyes.

“Sweetheart, can I come in?”

Boston sat up and held out her arms like she used to do when she was alone and scared as a little child. Her mother came to her. Taking Boston in her arms, she held her close against her chest, gently swaying back and forth as Boston’s tears broke loose again, wetting her mother’s breast.

“Shh, my darling,” Carmen cooed with lullaby softness like she used to do when Boston was a frightened child. “Everything is all right.”

Everything isn’t all right, I’m not two anymore. I’m eighteen in six weeks. “How can you say that? You have no idea what I’m going through.”

Carmen sat back. “Then tell me.”

Boston looked at her mother, wondering if she meant it. She pulled her knees up to her chest and hugged the blanket around them. She had been so mad at her mother for uprooting her from her friends and moving them thousands of miles away to this hole of a place to get away from their father that she had punished her with anger. Boston’s sullen disposition had killed their communication.

A year had passed and the distance between them had grown. How could she ever convey the extreme loneliness she felt from being ostracized at school, the horrifying terror of nearly being raped, the exhilaration of having the boy she adored come to her rescue, or the pain of seeing that same boy walk away like he didn’t even care if she were alive?

Boston searched for the right words. “Some boys attacked me.”

Carmen reached above Boston’s head and switched on the light. Horror had drained her mother’s face of color. Boston had to say something before her mother got the wrong idea. “I’m not hurt.”

“Did they…”

“Jason stopped them.”

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Then who is the Shooter?

May 6th, 2011

PUZZLE

Here is another teaser compliments of Flash 55 and Theme Thursday. This is an exert from my book, DiSemblance:

“This is weird.”

Bruce waited for Angela to take the lead. … she knelt next to the coroner, “What’s weird?

“The skin’s colder than the ambient air temperature. It’s like he’s been in a freezer.”

Angela and Bruce both looked over at the refrigerated coffin which held Charlene Dunn’s frozen body. ..

Angela frowned. “You’re telling us our shooter was dead before the shooting started?”

If this teaser sparks a question you want answered,

Send me an email: shanae@mtaonline.net

And I will answer it on my AskShanae blog.

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Theme Thursday/Flash 55: Sleep

April 29th, 2011

I enjoy the challenge of creating a book teaser from DiSemblance out of the theme each week for Theme Thursday.  While I was doing it, I realized that if I kept this post to 55 words, I could meet G-man’s requirements as well. So I’d like to introduce a different kind of sleep from an exert out of my book…

 

“Get him out of there!”

George pushed a button at the computer terminal. The alcove in the back whooshed, its red light blinking. Readying his forty-five, he targeted the alcove as the doors parted.

Inside, strapped standing up, handcuffed to metal posts, with wires protruding from both sides of his head, Jason stared – his eyes glazed …in slumber.

 

Every writer has to start somewhere and this is my beginning.

I need to show interest in my novel so that I can get a publisher to pick it up and publish it.

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Theme Thursday: Television

April 22nd, 2011

I remember watching the old television series “Star Trek” when I was a kid and wishing that I could have a hologram machine like they did.  When times got tough and it was hard to deal with the reality of high school with all of the drama of being a gangly teenage girl, I would dream about being able to push a button and then walk through a door into the world of my dreams.

It was fun being able to create a novel centered around a teenage boy whose father created just such a machine. Then to have him get lost in that world by creating replicas of his friends… only to have his whole world come crashing down when his father’s invention was stolen by a psychotic serial killer.  (…its not as dark as it sounds.)

 

Every writer has to start somewhere and this is my beginning. I need to show interest in my novel so that I can get a publisher to pick it up and publish it.

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Friday Flash 55: Mirrors

April 22nd, 2011

To put your life in danger from time to time…

breeds a saneness in dealing

with day-to-day trivialities. Nevil Shute

 

TOWARDS THE END OF THE BOOK:

Jason scanned the sea of mirrors for the real Boston, but they all looked alike. Blood oozed across the reflections. Time was running out. This place was like a chamber of horrors…

…Like dominos, one by one, the mirrors exploded. Jason could not stop Dr. Paden’s impulsive anger. He had to shut the program down before Boston was blown apart.

 


Let’s Play — Friday Flash 55:

April 15th, 2011

A Business Law Doodle

Characterization: today my entry is not from the book, DiSemblance, but includes the book’s main character, Jason Tanner and his brother, Isaac. Jason is in the middle of designing a digital copy of his girlfriend for his father’s invention, a futuristic hologram machine.

Let’s play:

“You goofed, Dude.”

How could Isaac say that Jason thought? The digital-image pieces came together perfectly:  her curves, the depth of her smile, her lanky, but luscious legs… “You’re crazy! She’s perfect.”

“The thumb’s sick!”

The picture he had shot during business law sent shivers through him… He remembered drawing those dots — her skin beneath his pen.